My homecoming is long lasting
But I don't matter since it is full of love
My mother driving the car
And my brother sleeping in the back
I always talk with Mom
Every day something new
'cause I want to hear all her wisdoms
Her voice is beautiful and peaceful
As the waves hitting the shore
Through the window, the day decays
And when I arrive home, it's almost night
The best part of it, is that my dog receives me
His affection towards me is as big as the sea
So, that is what's inside of each being I love
It is impossible to describe how comfortable I feel to it
And, also, I understand that I don't need such a huge family to be blissful
Amazing work Olivia!
ResponderEliminarYour poem is very expressive, you´ve made great use of vocabulary and structures. It´s interesting that images connected with water are repeated, this gives the poem unity and coherence.
You got to a great conclusion which was ideal to end your poem. Congratulations!
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